Here it is, be kind:
This Love
It is an ocean without a boat.
It is a flame without kindling.
It is a bright star deprived of a sky.
This is my love.
It is a pair of empty arms,
It is a pair of waiting ears.
It is a heart with room to spare.
This is my love.
It is a desperate search,
It is a ship looking for a beacon.
It is a knight looking for a liege.
This is my love.
It is a sword that has seen no battles.
It is a bandage without a wound to heal.
It is a shelter with a waiting fire.
This is my love.
It is a source of waiting laughter.
It is an untapped well of comfort.
It is the words "Tell me all about it."
This is my love.
It is a vision of children.
It is a vision of contented nights.
It is a vision of a warm bed.
This is my love.
It is piles of silly gifts.
It is a mischievious touch.
It has been waiting a long time.
Who will claim this love?
You're so banned.
Under capitalism, man exploits man. Under communism, it's just the opposite. - John Kenneth Galbraith
In my bowels.
It's not something people hear about.
For the rest of y'all, why y'all gotta be hatin' on grandmas like that?
EDIT: Oh, wow, that's pretty fucking funny. Trolling to be sure, but funny. Karnaj fucked around with this message on 03-07-2006 at 02:26 PM.
Under capitalism, man exploits man. Under communism, it's just the opposite. - John Kenneth Galbraith
Other than that, it's really, really cliche, and doesn't invoke any feelings beside a small form of pity really. Alot of the lines don't even make sense,
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It is a sword that has seen no battles.
It is a bandage without a wound to heal.
It is a shelter with a waiting fire.
This is my love.
Sword that's seen no battles? The hell? Even if that were basically saying "I've never had a girlfirend, the 'shelter with a waiting fire' makes no goddamn sense.
The repitition gets old after the fourth or so time, and there really isn't a theme from paragraph to paragraph, as if you were just copying it from a journal withouht thinking of where to place it.
So re-write, but please don't post here, we're not a poetry board.
Ferret fucked around with this message on 03-07-2006 at 02:28 PM.
Edit: Oh shit, it's mightion's? I need to refresh more often.
I'll leave the thread open, change it to flame, ban Waisz and sort of giggle.
Edit: Right after lunch. We're having chili with beans. Mr. Parcelan fucked around with this message on 03-07-2006 at 02:53 PM.
I'm pretty sure there's a statute of limitations somewhere that's run out...
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Mr. Parcelan put down Tada! magazine long enough to type:
I don't know whether to laugh or cry.I'll leave the thread open, change it to flame, ban Waisz and sort of giggle.
Edit: Right after lunch. We're having chili with beans.
Now is this Waisz, or is it "Waisz"?
Under capitalism, man exploits man. Under communism, it's just the opposite. - John Kenneth Galbraith
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Mightion Defensor had this to say about Duck Tales:
Yeah, it's a poem I wrote four years ago, and yes, it even makes me cringe when I read it today.I'm pretty sure there's a statute of limitations somewhere that's run out...
Why would you admit to that? I don't think anyone would have known except Waisz if you hadn't posted the link.
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Karnaj got all f'ed up on Angel Dust and wrote:
Now is this Waisz, or is it "Waisz"?
My biggest fear is that someday I'll be arrested for a crime I didn't commit and prosecuted by Jack McCoy.
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From the Book of Armaments, Ferret did read;
Why would you admit to that? I don't think anyone would have known except Waisz if you hadn't posted the link.
Someone would have figured it out or done a search eventually.
Or, maybe I just felt like exposing a troll and a coward.
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Mightion Defensor wrote this then went back to looking for porn:
Someone would have figured it out or done a search eventually.Or, maybe I just felt like exposing a troll and a coward.
You're a loser.
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From the Book of Armaments, Mr. Parcelan did read;
My biggest fear is that someday I'll be arrested for a crime I didn't commit and prosecuted by Jack McCoy.
Why? They'd just find the real killer at the fifty-three minute mark.
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Mr. Parcelan had this to say about Cuba:
My biggest fear is that someday I'll be arrested for a crime I didn't commit and prosecuted by Jack McCoy.
That man will eat your soul in court. While boning your mother.
Just to prove a point.
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The propaganda machine of Mr. Parcelan's junta released this statement:
My biggest fear is that someday I'll be arrested for a crime I didn't commit and prosecuted by Jack McCoy.
Oh, so it was "Waisz," then. Gotcha.
OR WAS IT??!?!
Under capitalism, man exploits man. Under communism, it's just the opposite. - John Kenneth Galbraith
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Mr. Parcelan wrote:
You're a loser.
A loser who never did anything to you, except not live according to your specifications. Which, I would imagine, change each time it's necessary in order for you to have someone to make fun of.
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We were all impressed when LeMiere wrote:
That man will eat your soul in court. While boning your mother.Just to prove a point.
He's relentless. He wins, like, ALL of his cases.
And I just know he'd convict me. He'd pull stuff out like "They found your semen all over the crime scene!" and "We have witnesses that saw your semen all over the crime scene!"
Semen will somehow be involved.
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Mightion Defensor attempted to be funny by writing:
A loser who never did anything to you, except not live according to your specifications. Which, I would imagine, change each time it's necessary in order for you to have someone to make fun of.
You are such a noble martyr.
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Mr. Parcelan fell asleep and read just about every paragraph.
You are such a noble martyr.
I'd rather be that than a hypocritical bully.
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Mr. Parcelan said this about your mom:
He's relentless. He wins, like, ALL of his cases.And I just know he'd convict me. He'd pull stuff out like "They found your semen all over the crime scene!" and "We have witnesses that saw your semen all over the crime scene!"
Semen will somehow be involved.
He always loses the cases when the grey-bearded asshole judge is involved. The one that overrules the jury all the time.
You need to get that judge, man. Or else you're done for.
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From the book of Mightion Defensor, chapter 3, verse 16:
I'd rather be that than a hypocritical bully.
I have never denied nor apologized for my hypocrisy. I'd rather be a bully than a guy that is universally loathed by the boards just because of his very existence.
Even Bajah hates you, brah. Die.
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Mr. Parcelan was naked while typing this:
I have never denied nor apologized for my hypocrisy. I'd rather be a bully than a guy that is universally loathed by the boards just because of his very existence.Even Bajah hates you, brah. Die.
Teehee. You said 'brah.'
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LeMiere had this to say about Captain Planet:
He always loses the cases when the grey-bearded asshole judge is involved. The one that overrules the jury all the time.You need to get that judge, man. Or else you're done for.
That guy's not all bad at times. He did support the gun rights, but he also threw out a jury verdict when those two guys raped a bunch of girls.
I think he just hates Jack.
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LeMiere had this to say about John Romero:
Teehee. You said 'brah.'
I think you have to start every sentence with teehee with that title.
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From the book of Maradon!, chapter 3, verse 16:
Mightion's titles are getting pretty brutal.
FYI, this last one wasn't my doing.
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There was much rejoicing when Mr. Parcelan said this:
That guy's not all bad at times. He did support the gun rights, but he also threw out a jury verdict when those two guys raped a bunch of girls.I think he just hates Jack.
He does. He really does. What a bastard.
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Bent over the coffee table, Maradon! squealed:
Mightion's titles are getting pretty brutal.
You gotta admit it's pretty difficult to feel sorry for someone who complains about not being able to find a job. . .yet spends 70 hours a week playing video games.
--Satan, quoted by John Milton
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Mr. Parcelan wrote their words upon the rocks;
I have never denied nor apologized for my hypocrisy. I'd rather be a bully than a guy that is universally loathed by the boards just because of his very existence.Even Bajah hates you, brah. Die.
I knew that Texan bastard couldn't be trusted. 
Besides, "universally" would mean "by 100 percent of the population", not "by me and my pack of braying hyenas".
Die? Even if I was suicidal, I wouldn't give you the pleasure... not that you'd have any way of finding out, anyway.
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We were all impressed when Mightion Defensor wrote:
Besides, "universally" would mean "by 100 percent of the population", not "by me and my pack of braying hyenas".
They're all out to get you, that's right. Every last one of them.
Mr. Parcelan fucked around with this message on 03-07-2006 at 03:26 PM.
sigpic courtesy of This Guy, original modified by me
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There was much rejoicing when Mr. Parcelan said this:
They're all out to get you, that's right. Every last one of them.
The future is littered with prizes, and of course I'm the main addressee...
but the point that I must emphasize is..
YOU WON'T GET A SNIFF WITHOUT ME!
